Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 77, revelation, Developing Storyline Rising Action

19 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 77, revelation, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Here is my proposed cover for Valeska.  I decided on a white cover style.

You can see more at www.GoddessofDarkness.com.

In real life, where is truth?  This is usually a very difficult idea to evaluate.  Anyone who has lived very long knows that there is truth, but especially today, in a pluralistic society, it is very difficult to define truth that gets more than a 50-50 agreement.  There are some things that do hit very high.  For example, if you ask people if they believe in God–that gets in the 90s.  If you ask people if there is truth, you might get in the 50s.  I’m really not trying to give you a philosophical or a theological conundrum–I do know there is truth, and I believe people can know it.  The problem is the expression of truth (what is truth) and the proof itself (how can I know it is true).  This is a similar problem in writing.
Some might imagine that writing is about telling or revealing or showing truth.  That isn’t what writing is about at all–writing is about entertaining.   If a little truth gets sprinkled along the way so much the better.  The problem is about truth and about truth in the writing itself.  In many of my novels, I don’t want the reader to know the entire truth about a character or an event–the novel is shrouded in mystery because it is supposed to be a mystery (not necessarily a mystery novel).  As I mentioned before, in writing, almost all novels are or should be about character revelation (the revelation of a developed character).  This entire idea assumes the reader doesn’t know everything about a character and the character is slowly revealed during the novel.  The same is true for the events of the novel.  If I gave a synopsis at the beginning and you knew the outcome at the end, would you read the novel?   Novels themselves are a revelation of both the characters and the events in the novel.  This is the “truth” of the novel–if you like.  This truth is what the author revels through the writing.  Like truth in the world, the world of the novel becomes real and is powerful through the design of the revelation.

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 76, more ah ha resolution, Developing Storyline Rising Action

18 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 76, more ah ha resolution, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Here is my proposed cover for Valeska.  I decided on a white cover style.

You can see more at www.GoddessofDarkness.com.

An ah ha moment is a concept in showing.  For example, if I show you a blush, or tears, or an embarrassed chuckle, you might guess a character is in love.  A wise author doesn’t tell us that a man loves a woman, a wise author shows us that a man loves a woman.  You might throw in a well placed confession of love, but that is simply gravy for those who couldn’t get the point of every other indicator.  However, if a character shows absolutely no indications of love and suddenly confesses love–the author has sent a very powerful signal.

Showing means there are consistent actions and words throughout a novel.  Words that are not consistent with actions or indications mean something is really wrong.  An author who is writing in the groove knows this and uses this.  On the other hand, if you tell us a man loves a woman and there are no indications or no words, what does your statement mean.  Does it mean anything at all.  In fact, when an author moves into the omniscient and tells us something, that is truth–isn’t it?  I mean, that is like the words of God stepping in to deliver a truth to the world of the writing.  It also means the world of the writing has turned into pure fantasy.

If I show you a blush and a tear and an embarrassed chuckle, I might have shown you love.  When the character states, “I love you,” he might be telling the truth–perhaps not.  The ah ha moment is when the reader realizes that the character is lying–or not.

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 75, ah ha resolution, Developing Storyline Rising Action

17 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 75, ah ha resolution, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Here is my proposed cover for Valeska.  I decided on a white cover style.

You can see more at www.GoddessofDarkness.com.

I am an educator and one of my most powerful tools is an ah ha moment.  An ah ha moment is where a teacher gives the students just enough information so that they can draw a correct conclusion on their own.  When I develop a lesson, I build in many ah ha moments for my students–I do the same in my writing.

One of the most powerful tools an author has is this kind of reader self discovery.  This is what is meant by showing where the reader draws inferences that leads to a deeper understanding of the writing.  Many times my readers ask me: aren’t you worried that some of your readers won’t get all the wonderful things you include in your writing?  I am not worried at all.  I know that the astute reader will get most of everything in the writing.  Those who are not as well versed may not, but that’s okay–if they read the novel again, they will get more and more.  Each reading will be like a new experience for them.  This is my goal.

The point is to place markers in the writing that a person of good education, strong language skills, and strong reading experience will understand.  These points should not be so necessary to the writing that if they are missed the reader doesn’t get the writing, but they should be additive to the overall plot and theme of the novel.

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 74, tags Narrative Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

16 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 74, tags Narrative Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Here is my proposed cover for Valeska.  I decided on a white cover style.

You can see more at www.GoddessofDarkness.com.

The use of tags in the narrative can also be a powerful identifier as well as an information cue to your readers.  For example, I mentioned that a sign of nervousness in one of my characters in my unpublished novel, Khione was to draw his fingers through his hair.  If, in the narrative, he pulls his finger through his hair, the readers know he is nervous.  This is part of the showing in description and action that I was writing about before.  Your entire purpose as a writer is to show and not tell.  Using a tag such as this in narrative shows your readers a lot about your character’s frame of mind without telling anything.

This is what I mean about showing and not telling.  This is also a classic writing trick of expressing the feelings of a character without telling the readers what is in the character’s mind.  I also want to relate all of this back to tension and release.  If you tell me a character is scared–who cares.  On the other hand, if the character shows signs of nervousness, if his hands are sweating, if his teeth are chattering, shazam, the character might just be scared.  How much more power is there in description that leads the reader to a conclusion as opposed to telling the reader the conclusion.  This is what I call an ah ha moment–this is obviously a small ah ha moment, but a natural one.  There is much more that the author can do to develop such moments.

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 73, tags Conversation Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

15 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 73, tags Conversation Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Just as handles are used to physically identify and reintroduce a character in a novel, a tag is also used in conversation to identify and intellectually identify a character.  Tags can be as simple as a tagline such as “I said too much,” in all its variations.  I use this tagline to identify Leila in Valeska.  Leila is a character who has been alone too much and many times gives too much information to others when she doesn’t mean to.  This becomes a running joke in the conversation of the novel.  A tagline is not necessarily unique for a character or a novel, but unless it is a joke, it can be over done.

A tag is more normal and is a characteristic that is usually used to identify a character in conversation.  For example, in Khione, the protagonist’s helper’s tag is to run his fingers through his short hair–it was a nervous habit.  The character’s mother does the same.  The tag was a means of identifying the character’s and his mother’s nervousness.

Classic tags that I have used are lighting a cigarette or a cigar, drinking certain types of liquor, facial habits or quirks, scratching parts of the face, etc.  There are many ways to differentiate characters and to display their emotions during conversations.  These types of details can quickly identify and bring out the character of your characters–especially in conversation, but also in the narrative.

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 72, handles Conversation Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

14 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 72, handles Conversation Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Tags and handles are the means you use to identify characters in conversation and in your novel.  If you introduce a character as wearing bowties, then every time you mention a bowtie, you will make your readers remember this character.  This is a handle.  These are critical to identifying characters especially in conversation.  For example, a very simple handle is “Leila’s mother.”  If Leila has only one mother (as opposed to a stepmother etc.), then the handle reminds your reader who she is.
Let me explain why handles are so important.  If I introduce a character, Sveta Long, the reader may or may not recognize this character when I mention her again in the novel.  I must describe the character, Sveta Long (and I mean the description not anything else), and I should give her a handle.  In the case of Valeska, Sveta Long happens to be the head of Stele.  When I reintroduce Sveta, all I have to do is tell you Sveta Long, the director of Stele.  The reader should remember the character immediately.  On the other hand, if I simply mention the name, Sveta Long, the reader may or may not remember the character or the context of the character.

You could compare this to when you meet people you have been introduced to before.  If you meet a person at work, your have a completely different context than if you met them at the grocery store, or if you met them at a party.  When I give the reader (or you as a person) the context of the meeting, you can immediately remember the person.  Many writers don’t understand this.  They give us names and then reintroduce the names–most people don’t really remember names well, they remember context.  Put a handle on a character and your readers will get it.  What about tags or taglines?

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 71, action Conversation Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

13 September 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 71, action Conversation Tension, Developing Storyline Rising Action

Announcement: I received the proofs a few days ago and completed my notes on them within the three day deadline.  The title of the series is Ancient Light and is based on my novel Aegypt.  The next two novels will be Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness.  They will be published individually and as a 3 in 1 book.  The initial cover is already developed, and you can see it at http://www.ancientlight.com.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction:  I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon.  This was my 21st novel, and on this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing.  In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes.  You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel–start with http://ldalford.wordpress.com/2010/12/12/daemon-installment-1-the-incantation/.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published.  I’ll keep you informed along the way.  At this moment, I’m showing you the creative process I used to put together the novel.

Today’s Blog:  To see the steps in the publication process, go to my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

Here are my four rules (plus one) of writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your  writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my new novel, Valeska, is: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

I mentioned yesterday that conversation can and should drive your action scenes.  Since I am providing (on my website) the first chapter of Valeska, I’ll give you an example of action and conversation from it.  George Mardling is dying:

He was dying.

A movement caught him by surprise. It came from the dark alleyway away from the street. A small person moved very quickly from the opening to stand right in front of him. It stopped suddenly and whimpered, then sat on its haunches. It squatted outside of his reach and watched him. Its face was thin and pale. The face barely showed in his night vision goggle. That, in itself was surprising. It wore clothing that seemed exceedingly fine, but they were filthy and damp. It had on the filthy remains of a girl’s party dress. The dress had once been white with red or pink ribbons, but now it was torn and bedraggled. The ribbons blended with the stains on the dress. The stains seemed like long dried blood and not just the dirt of the streets.

The girl, it was a girl, stared at him with bright eyes that seemed tinged with silver. They appeared slightly dull in the night vision goggle. Her hair was black and matted. It reached almost to the cobbles of the alleyway where she squatted. Her face was finely etched and hard looking. She let her tongue slip out of her mouth. She licked her lips. Her tongue was slightly pointed, and George could swear, her teeth were pointed like fangs.

She raised her eyes to his and spoke. It wasn’t Polish. She spoke high German with a strange lilt. Her voice was low and melodious, “You, mortal man, you are dying.”

George groaned, “I’m dying. Can you call the police with my phone?”

She eyed him strangely, “I don’t have a phone here—what good would it do?”

“My phone. It fell at my side.”

She shrugged, “I don’t know what that is. I wouldn’t be able to use it. You are dying.”

“I am dying. Can you help me?”

The girl stared at him, “You are dying. It is a full moon—I am starving.”

You obviously can’t do every action scene and every action sequence with conversation.  In this short example, note that there is space for setting (description) and narrative.  However, the tension in the scene is purely action based–George Mardling, the agent, is dying.  The vampire is hunting.  George ruined her hunt.  That comes out in further conversation.  The tension in the scene moves from George dying to the vampire’s hunting and needs.  George is still dying, but the tension in the scene has suddenly changed.  This is the power of conversation and the power of showing.  Notice that everything here is showing.  There is no telling.  You learn everything from description and conversation.
Note also some other details in the writing.  As I’ve written before, use 100 to 300 words to describe major characters when you introduce them.  Introduce handles and tags with the characters.  A consistent tag with the vampire is her tongue and fangs.  It is also her choice in clothing.  She likes to wear pink and white especially with lace and ribbons.  These kinds of tags will allow you to bring the character into character in your writing.  Perhaps I should discuss this next.

More tomorrow.

I’ll repeat my published novel websites so you can see more examples: http://www.ldalford.com/, and the individual novel websites: http://www.aegyptnovel.com/, http://www.centurionnovel.com/, http://www.thesecondmission.com/, http://www.theendofhonor.com/, http://www.thefoxshonor.com/, and http://www.aseasonofhonor.com/.

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