Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 117, yet more action how to develop Storyline, Entertaining, Rising Action

29 October 2014, Writing Ideas – Vampire Novel, part 117, yet more action how to develop Storyline, Entertaining, Rising Action

Announcement: My novel Aegypt will be republished in a second edition, and the follow-on novels, Sister of Light and Sister of Darkness will be published soon after.  Before that, all three novels will come out in a single book called Ancient Light.  I’ll keep you updated.

Introduction: I wrote the novel Aksinya: Enchantment and the Daemon. This was my 21st novel and through this blog, I gave you the entire novel in installments that included commentary on the writing. In the commentary, in addition to other general information on writing, I explained, how the novel was constructed, the metaphors and symbols in it, the writing techniques and tricks I used, and the way I built the scenes. You can look back through this blog and read the entire novel beginning with http://www.pilotlion.blogspot.com/2010/10/new-novel-part-3-girl-and-demon.html.

I’m using this novel as an example of how I produce, market, and eventually (we hope) get a novel published. I’ll keep you informed along the way.

Today’s Blog: To see the steps in the publication process, visit my writing website http://www.ldalford.com/ and select “production schedule,” you will be sent to http://www.sisteroflight.com/.

The four plus one basic rules I employ when writing:

1. Don’t confuse your readers.
2. Entertain your readers.
3. Ground your readers in the writing.
4. Don’t show (or tell) everything.
5. Immerse yourself in the world of your writing.

All novels have five discrete parts:
1.  The initial scene (the beginning)
2.  The rising action
3.  The climax
4.  The falling action
5.  The dénouement

The theme statement of my newest novel, Valeska, is this: An agent of the organization becomes involved with a vampire girl during a mission, she becomes dependent on the agent, and she is redeemed.

Here is my proposed cover for Valeska:

I decided on a white cover style.  You can see more at www.GoddessofDarkness.com.

The question then is how do we approach writing the storyline in an action scene to make it entertaining?  First, set the scene, second, set the characters, third, introduce the characters into the action.  Obviously, if you have characters (more than one), you can also use dialog in the scene and then you have a “dialog” scene.  If you have a single character, now you need to be very careful about how you write.  You don’t want to tell too much, and I assure you, most authors can’t help telling a little.

Without dialog, you must use tricks to “reveal” without dialog.  You might ask, why reveal at all.  Here is the example, I won’t write it out.  I will leave it as an exercise.  Write an intimate scene between two people using dialog only.  If you are any kind of experienced writer, you will find this very easy to do.  You can exclude every piece of description and write a wonderful and sensual intimate scene with only dialog.  For those who don’t get intimate, I mean sexual.  You can be incredibly explicit with only conversation.  If you read back in Aksinya, I wrote just such a scene depicting Aksinya’s wedding night.  Note, that you can approach this type of scene in more than one way.  You can write with little conversational revelation about the thinking of the characters, and you can write it with extensive conversational revelation of the thinking of the characters.  You can’t write such a scene without directly or indirectly revealing the feelings of the characters.

Now, write a similar scene with a single character–no dialog.  First, you can’t reveal any thinking without “telling.”  Second, you can’t reveal any feelings directly.  Third, if you use the trick of soliloquy, you can give us a lot, but you’ve suddenly turned the scene into a dialog.  Sometimes, the third idea doesn’t work very well–sometimes it does.  My point is to show you how action is dependent on description and not “telling,” and how dialog opens so much more possibility for the author.

More tomorrow.

For more information, you can visit my author site http://www.ldalford.com/, and my individual novel websites:



About L.D. Alford

L. D. Alford is a novelist whose writing explores with originality those cultures and societies we think we already know. His writing distinctively develops the connections between present events and history—he combines them with threads of reality that bring the past alive. L. D. Alford is familiar with technology and cultures—he is widely traveled and earned a B.S. in Chemistry from Pacific Lutheran University, an M.S. in Mechanical Engineering from Boston University, a Ph.D. in Aerospace Engineering from The University of Dayton, and is a graduate of Air War College, Air Command and Staff College, and the USAF Test Pilot School. L. D. Alford is an author who combines intimate scientific and cultural knowledge into fiction worlds that breathe reality. He is the author of three historical fiction novels: Centurion, Aegypt, and The Second Mission, and three science fiction novels: The End of Honor, The Fox’s Honor, and A Season of Honor.
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